In: Finance
Analyze the following sentences and rewrite them in a
more concise manner (using active voice where applicable), cutting
out as many unnecessary words and phrases as possible without
reducing the meaning of each passage.
1. It is thought by Trudy that her young puppy dog, which
constantly runs, jumps, scampers, and rushes around the house, is
in need of more walks over the course of an entire day.
2. At this point in time, the actions of Richard towards his
colleagues and co-workers will be
considered unacceptable and unsatisfactory by the department
supervisors.
(1 ): Trudy thinks that her puppy, which rushes around the house, needs more walk.
(2 ): At this point in time, supervisors consider Richard’s actions towards his colleagues as unacceptable.