Question

*Make these sentences more concise by eliminating redundancy and repitition.

a. Igor's fellow colleagues are ambitious.

b. We ask for everyone's mutual cooperation during this busy time.

c. This report is the most informative report on the project.

d. The consensus of opinion is that we agree with Tanisha's idea.

e. Sam agrees, Tanya agrees, and Soon-ye agrees too.

*Combine the following sentences three times, each time creating one fluent sentence that places emphasis in a different placel. For the first combination, emphasize the negative aspects on the job. For the second combination, emphasize the positive aspects. For the third combination, emphasize the salary.

The job offers an attractive salary. It demands long work hours. It can be stressful. Promotions are rapid.

*Add variety to the following string of similar sentences.

Because people are busy these days, television DVRs are unsurprisingly popular. Because you can record while you are at work, you don't have to worry about missing your favorite program. In addition, because you can record programs that show late at night, you don't have to stay up late to catch your favorite programs. Finally, in case you are on vacation, you can set the DVR to record your favorite shows automatically every week.

*Make these sentences clearer by eliminating faulty parallism.

a. The weather today is going to be cold, rainy, and without much sun.

b. My television picture is cloudy and I can see pixellation.

c. My car needs a tune-up, an oil change, and the tires should be replaced.

d. The new teacher is enthusiatic, skilled, and you can depend on her.

e. In his new job, Ramon felt lonely and without a friend.

*Adjust the tone of the following sentences to improve the connection between the writer and the reader.

a. The writer of this letter would like a refund.

b. The requested report will be sent next week.

c. Students at this college will find the faculty always willing to help.

d. No way am I going to approve this dog a a proposal.

e. Because of your divistion's lagging productivity, a management review may be needed.

Answer 1

* Eliminating redundancy and repetition.

a. Igor's colleagues are ambitious.

b. We ask for everyone's cooperation during this busy time.

c. This is the most informative report on the project.

d. The consensus of opinion is with Tanisha's idea.

e. Sam, Tanya, and Soon-ye agrees.

* The three combinations of the sentence.

1. Even though the job offers an attractive salary and the promotions are rapid, it demands too long and stressful working hours.

2. The job demands long stressful working hours, but the promotions are rapid with attractive salary.

3. The job offers a very attractive salary with rapid promotion for those who are willing to take up the challenge of working a bit longer hours.

* Add variety

Television DVR's have come with new features of recording your favorite programs which you may miss due to your busy schedule. Now, you can record and watch your favorite programs at your suitable time. Also, it offers to record your weekly programs when you are out for your vacations.

* Faulty parallelism

a. Today's weather is cold and rainy, with less sunshine.

b. My Television picture is cloudy due to pixelation.

c. My car needs tune-up, oil change and tyre replacement.

d. The new teacher is enthusiastic, skilled, and dependable.

e. In his new job, Ramon lonely without a friend.

* Tone of the sentence.

a. The writer of this letter wants a refund.

b. We will send your requested report next week.

c. The faculty of this college are always there to help the students.

d. In any manner I will not approve this proposal.

e. A management review will be conducted for your division's underperformance.