In: Economics
Concise and Concrete Sentences
Directions: Carefully read
each of the following sentences; rewrite each making...
Concise and Concrete Sentences
Directions: Carefully read
each of the following sentences; rewrite each making it concise and
concrete. Make each sentence as short as possible without losing
essential detail and as specific and detailed as necessary to
convey its meaning. DO NOT change the meaning or drop any essential
details of any sentence. After reading your sentence, your reader
should have no questions about the intended message.
EX.: The employee told me I could receive money
back.
Correction: George, the manager, told me I could receive
$12.38 back. This is no longer, yet it is detailed enough so you
understand the facts of the matter.
- With a smile on her face, our manager informed us that at this
point in time we need to notify the auditors of the planned meeting
next week.
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- The agent notified him that his flight was early Thursday
morning.
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- A customer last evening complained that she had received poor
customer service.
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- Doug was told that he would receive a monetary reward in the
near future for winning the competition.
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- Employees who meet the eligibility requirements were told that
they needed to come to decisions regarding whether they wished to
avail themselves of the newly announced increases in reimbursement
prior to the last day of the week of the current quarter.
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- Since Sharron will be on vacation soon, she was happy to hear
that the next sales incentive meeting will be held in the near
future.
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- The recruiter assured me that I would enjoy working for XYZ,
Inc. because their profits are up and their benefits are good.
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- The new employee in the purchasing department said he was sure
we could get the new equipment we needed because there was still
some money in our account.
- The manager asked someone to go to Office Max and buy some
supplies.
- The auditor claimed that the accountant’s report was not
good.
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