Question

The following sentences and paragraphs highlight some of the problems you learned about in this chapter. Use what you have learned to rewrite + examples to make them clear and readable. 1. From a one-page notice informing employees which machines they can use in a training facility: Employees should be well advised that they should use only the first row of machines the HP PCs. All other machines are used only for classes for training new users. If an employee doesn't do this, he will be asked to leave the training room. From an email message sent to all employees of a law firm advising them to be alert for a new virus: This virus has been known to cause the destruction of files, and it is very important that you perform a search of your hard drive to try and attempt eradication of it using the search feature. Search for EDT file extensions and delete them. Then the problem will be solved. 3. From an instruction sheet that will be handed out during a training session on a new email package; this passage explains the capabilities of the package to users who have never used email before: Email messages are stored on a central server, and you download it every time you open one, in effect. You can save it to a local disk if you want to keep it. From a booklet that a user support department will distribute to employees of an insurance organization to explain the capabilities of a new software claims management package: This is a new type of CMS (claims management software) that every adjuster, regardless of his level, will benefit from, greatly. This claims management software a (1) organize claims information, (2) be used while you are on the telephone, (3) do reports by claim type, and (4) for generation of summary claims information.

Answer 1

The following sentences and paragraphs highlight some of the problems that you've learned about in given chapter. on the basis of what ypu've learn, you'll rewrite the examples to make them clear and readable.

1. from a one page notice informing employees which machines they can use in a training facility:

Employees should be well advised that they should only use the first row of machines the HP PCs, all other machines are used for classes for training new users. If an employee doesn't do this, he/she will be asked to leaving the room.

Rewriting it to make them clear and readable:

Employees should only be advised to use the HP PCs that are located in the first row. The remaining PCs are reserved for new users training classes. Employees who fail to follow this notice will be asked to leave the training room.

2. From an email message sent to all employees of a law firm advising them to alert for a new virus:

The virus has been known to cause the destruction of files, and it is very important that you perform a search of your hard drive to try and attempt eradication of it using the search feature. search for EDT file extensions and delete them. then the problem will be solved.

Rewriting it to make them clear and readable:

The new computer virus has been known to cause the destruction of files that store in hard drive. the virus or malware is stored in .EDT file types. If the malware program will execute, it replicates itself by modifying the other files and try to insert their own malicious code that leads the destruction of files. so, it is very important that you perform a search in your hard drive for EDT file extensions files and attempt eradication of it by deletion. after this, scan your pc with good Anti-malware software and then restart. It will solve your problem.

3. From an instruction sheet that will be handled out during a training session on a new email package, this passage explains the capabilities of the package to users who have never used email before:

Email messages are stored on a central server, and you download it every time you open one, in effect. you can save it to a local disk if you want to keep it.

Rewriting it to make them clear and readable:

Email (ie short for electronic email) is the exchange of information between two individuals or group of individuals that stores on a central server as well as computers both by save it in a local disk for offline use. Email messages are exchanged between servers using SMTP protocol and various mail transfer agents like postfix or sendmail. email can be of form plaintext, files, images or other attachments that sent through a network to specific individual or groups of individuals.

4. from a booklet that a user support department will distribute to employees of an insurance organization to explain the capabilities of a new software claims management package:

this is a new type of CMS (claims management software) that every adjuster, regardless of his level, will benefit from, greatly. this claims management software a

• organize claims information.
• be used while you are on telephone
• do reports by claim type.
• for generation of summary claims information.

Rewriting it to make them clear and readable:

Introducing new type of CMS( i.e claims management software) that helps the respective insurer to manage and evaluate insurance claims. Insurer can be people, organizations, or companies. It is designed to provide claims management so that every adjuster, regardless of his level will take the benefit greatly. It highly ensures that all claim details are recorded in the centralized system.

this claims management software provides :

• Organize claims information and settlement workflows.
• Registering the claims information if Insurer are on the telephone, or alternatively, they can send email.
• paying the claim to insurer that registered for a claim.
• Allow the insurer to do reports by claim type.
• Summary of claims information.