Question

Revise this paragraph, which I’d call a “rough draft” Clean it up. It should be 3^rd person.      

Growing up my favorite vacations would always be to go camping. Because Camping is one of my all-time favorite things to do and still is to this day and I don’t think that will ever change. While camping, I love going on walks and seeing the beauty of the world around us that you normal don’t see in the everyday world. I really love the fresh air and smell of the pine trees and campfires. I love sitting around the campfire at night, smelling the burning wood, staring at the bright fire, looking up and being able to see all the bright stars in the dark sky, the stars you can’t seem to see and really enjoy in the city with all the different lights. I love the sounds you hear, the fire, people laughing and enjoying their families or just the complete silence away from the everyday world we live in. Camping is a very relaxing and peaceful. It can get you away from most things like technology. I also give you time to get physical activity in the fresh air. I love all the activities you can do while camping like swimming, fishing, canoeing, boating, boating was always some much fun and my favorite part was tubing. Having the water hit your face while spending through the water. Also, you can play board games and watching movies or just have family time when it’s raining outside. Vacations to the lake are like an escape from the outside world, and a chance to see nature and still have fun. My vacations to the lake will always remain memorable and special. I hope that one day I will be able to continue the tradition with my own family.

Answer 1

While growing up, his favourite vacations was always to go camping as it is his all time favorite activity to this day. During camping, he loves to go on walks and observing the beauty of the world all around us which one misses out on in the everday walk of life. He loves the breathe of fresh air and the smell of pine trees and campfires. He enjoys sitting around the campfires at night, taking pleasure in the smell of burning wood and looking at bright burning fire. He loves to look up at the sky full of bright stars which you do not see and admire in the city with all the lights around. He adores the sound he hears, the fire, people laughing and enjoying with their families. Even the complete silence is soothing which is not present in everyday world he lives in. Camping is definetly relaxing and peaceful, it gets one away from technology and allows to be more physically involved with nature. All the activities are enjoyed while camping such as swimming, fishing, canoeing, and boating being the most fun with tubing as the best part. The joy of having the water hit your face while speeding through the water is refreshing. Games can be played like board games. Family quality time is spent by doing such activities, even watching movies when its raining outside. Vacations to the lakeside are a great escape from the city life. It gives one a chance to reconnect with nature and enjoy it to the fullest. Such vactions always remain memorable and special. He hopes one day this tradition will be continued with his own family.