Question

13.1 Radical Rewrite: Rescuing a Slapdash Résumé (Obj. 4)

The following poorly organized and written résumé needs help to remedy its misspellings, typos, and inconsistent headings.

Your Task. By using the information in the resume, revise Isabella’s resume into a correctly formatted one-page chronological resume. Please read the resume section of your textbook, review the grading rubric and the chronological resume samples that I uploaded into Blackboard under Ch12 Writing Assignment.

Résumé of Isabella R. Jimenez

1340 East Phillips Ave., Apt. D Littleton, CO 80126

Phone 455-5182 • E-Mail: [email protected]

OBJECTIVE

I’m dying to land a first job in the “real world” with a big profitable company that will help me get ahead in the accounting field.

SKILLS

Word processing, Internet browsers (Explorer and Google), Powerpoint, Excel, type 40 wpm, databases, spreadsheets; great composure in stressful situations; 3 years as leader and supervisor and 4 years in customer service

EDUCATION

Arapahoe Community College, Littleton, Colorado. AA degree Fall 2013

Now I am pursuing a BA in Accounting at CSU-Pueblo, majoring in Accounting; my minor is Finance. My expected degree date is June 2015; I recieved a Certificate of Completion in Entry Level Accounting in December 2012.

I graduated East High School, Denver, CO in 2009.

Highlights:

· Named Line Manger of the Month at Target, 08/2009 and 09/2010

· Obtained a Certificate in Entry Level Accounting, June 2012

· Chair of Accounting Society, Spring and fall 2013

· Dean’s Honor List, Fall 2014

· Financial advisor training completed through Primerica (May 2014)

· Webmaster for M.E.Ch.A, Spring 2015

Part-Time Employment

Financial Consultant, 2014 to present

I worked only part-time (January 2014-present) for Primerica Financial Services, Pueblo, CO to assist clients in refinancing a mortgage or consolidating a current mortgage loan and also to advice clients in assessing their need for life insurance.

Target, Littleton, CO. As line manager, from September 2008-March 2012, I supervised 22 cashiers and front-end associates. I helped to write schedules, disciplinary action notices, and performance appraisals. I also kept track of change drawer and money exchanges; occasionally was manager on duty for entire store.

Mr. K’s Floral Design of Denver. I taught flower design from August, 2008 to September, 2009. I supervised 5 florists, made floral arrangements for big events like weddings, send them to customers, and restocked flowers.

Answer 1

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Weaknesses in the resume of Isabella R. Jimenez.

1. Poorly organized
2. Experiences or roles held are not listed in a chronological order
3. Education and expereicen need to be separately listed – not mixed together
4. Skills are spread out – she must segregate or separate her skill sets – like accountancy, leadership, florist experience
5. She has not clearly mentioned where she wants to be
6. It is hard for the reader to find out what is her primary and secondary skills are
7. From her resume it is not clear whether she is a technical writer, customer spport, accountant or who she is in terms of the profession.
8. Trainings and certification programmes need to be listed separately from the experience list

ALTERNATIVE ANSWER:

Following are the weakness in the resume which must be rectiified.

1. I’m dying to become an accounting associate in the “real world” with a big profitable company that will help me get the experience I need to become a CPA. In this statement; few words are negative; firstly not to started like I'm (it shuold be general statement)

• dying, should be replaced by positive aspectes like; I am keen too.
• Big profitable company; rather then use, a company where I can learn

2. SKILLS: Word like compo-sure is too fanatic, it should be simply removed. Too many "and" are also there

3. EDUCATION: It should be from highest degree to lowest one, preferably in tabular form. If not a tabular form, then at least in proper bullets, this one seems to be paragraph

4. EDUCATION: Words like, I recieved, my minor, my expected degreee etc. shuold be removed and must be written in simple words in tabular form or a single line stating education from higher to lower level

5. HIGHLIGHTS: Here also highlights should be of last achievement at first place and thus in reducing order. Please do mention full form of M.E.Ch.A

6. Highlights: Obtained a Certificate in Entry Level Accounting, June 2015. This is extra education done, not highlight of job roles. Hence this is to be named as Other qualifications. Post that write Highlights.

7. Part time employment:- Here things are although mentioned well in order from latter to older, but this should be properly written in bullet forms stating as:

• Name of the company
• Designation
• Key responsibilities
• Achievements

8. Teaching flower design experience is not relevant and must not be mentioned as; the objective says the aspirant wants to become an accountant and this experience is irrelavant.

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