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Please, edit for clarity and conciseness, for grammar, capitalization, punctuation, abbreviation, number style, word division, and vocabulary. Thank you

The Executive Summary (excerpt)

Purpose of the Proposal

This document will acquaint the reader with 3 principle topics by

·         Showing what the San Diego State University (SDSU) Suntrakker project is;

·         Showing that the team-oriented, interdepartmental disciplines at SDSU possess the tenacity and know-how to build and race a solar-powered vehicle in the World Solar Challenge Race in Austrailia next year;

·         Define and articulate how this business team expects to promote and generate the necessary support; funds, and materials from the student body, alumni, community and local businesses to sieze and executive this opportunity.

Project Profile

The Suntrakker Solar Car project was conceived by a small group of San Diego State University engineering students motivated by the success of the General motors “Sunrayce,” committed itself to designing and building a superior solar-powered vehicle to compete in the world Solar Challenge.

From modest Beginnings, the Suntrakker project quickly revolved into a cross-disciplinary educational effort encompassing students from many colleges of San Diego State University. The project has provided students participants and volunteers with valuable real-life experiences and has brought them together in an effort that benefits not only the students and the university but also the environment.

Sponsors of this project are not only contributing to the successful achievement of the overall Suntrakker project but will also enhance their goodwill, advertising, and name promotion by association with the project. In addition, the Suntrakker offers a unique opportunity for the companies who can donate parts and accessories to showcase their name and test field their products in public in this highly publicized international contest.

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Answer 1

The Executive Summary (excerpt)

Purpose of the Proposal:

This document will acquaint the readers with three principle topics by

• Explaining what the San Diego State University (SDSU) Suntrakker project is all about.
• Showing how the team-oriented, interdepartmental disciplines at SDSU possess the tenacity and know-how to build and race a solar-powered vehicle in the ‘World Solar Challenge Race’ in Australia next year.
• Presenting how this business team expects to promote and generate the necessary support, funds, and materials from the student body, alumni, community and local businesses through this opportunity.

Project Profile

The Suntrakker solar car project was conceived by a small group of San Diego State University engineering students, who were motivated by the success of the General Motors’ “Sunrayce,” and committed itself to designing and building a superior solar-powered vehicle to compete in the ‘World Solar Challenge Race’.

From its modest beginning, the Suntrakker project quickly shaped into a cross-disciplinary educational effort encompassing students from several colleges of San Diego State University. The project has provided students, participants and volunteers with valuable real-life experiences and has brought them together in an effort that benefits not only the students and the university but also the environment.

Sponsors of this project will not only contribute to the success of the Suntrakker project but will also enhance their goodwill and get promoted by associating with the project. The Suntrakker also offers an unique opportunity for the companies to donate parts and accessories to showcase their name and display their products in public in this highly marketed international contest.