Question

This is one of the questions and answers to one of my scholarship questions, I want help to review/edit/add to make it sound better please!

1. What is your most meaningful achievement, and how does it relate to your field of study and your future goals?

The most meaningful achievement I have faced was beating cancer in March 2016 during my senior year of high school. This experience changed my view on many aspects of my life. Being in the hospital for so many hours while being cared for by such amazing nurses made me want to be someone that can help others. I have gained a strong love andempathetic side for everyone, I want to help people and give them the hope of a second chance. During this life experience, I started to acknowledge how important my health is, not only with incorporating exercise but with eating nutritious food.

From then on, I started to gain a passion for nutrition. The medical setting is where I wanted to be. My goal is to one day be able to help children live a healthier life and give them the hope and love they need.

Answer 1

In march 2016,I was studying in senior year of high school ,during that period I struggled with cancer,and I was going through a bad experience,but with the help of strong prayers and medicine I survived from the that dangerous disease called cancer.This experience changed my view on many aspects of my life and also it was the Most meaningful and remembering achievement in my life.Being in the hospital for so many hours I experienced the amazing cares and love of nurses,and it help me to know the importance of someone that can love and  help others.I have gained a strong love and empathetic side for everyone,I understood importance to help people and give them the hope of a second chance.

During this life experience,I started to acknowledge how important my health is,not only with incorporating excercise but with eating nutritious food.From then on, I started to gain a passion for nutrition.The Medical setting is where I wanted to be. My goal is to one day be able to help children live a healthier and better life and give them the hope and love they need.